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26 May 2006 @ 07:10 pm
Awakening, by Nix  
Okay, so this is me dusting off my NCIS muses again. I'm not sure of this story. I feel like it's been ages since I wrote Gibbs and Tony. I also feel like this is just the beginning of something. I might write a sequel that gets more into the potential slashiness, but no promises.

TITLE: Awakening
AUTHOR: Nix (keparker AT shaw DOT ca)
CATEGORY: Gen, but with some slashy overtones
FANDOM: NCIS
PAIRING: The overtones are Gibbs/Tony. Otherwise, none.
RATING: G
WARNINGS: AU.
SPOILERS: None.
SUMMARY: Everyone in the world suddenly gains psychic abilities. There are consequences.
DISCLAIMER: Not mine. Not making money.
NOTES: Not betaed.

Sometimes they called it the change, or the transition, or just it, but mostly they called it the Awakening. It was a bitterly ironic name, at least to Gibbs, because it was the Awakening that had driven Tony, steadily and inevitably, into catatonia.

No one knew, yet, what had started it. Or maybe the change had been lurking in their genes, waiting for the right moment, and the only mystery was why now. They did know that it had happened everywhere in the world at once and that it hadn't been sudden. The latest estimates said ten days passed between the beginning of the Awakening and its peak.

At first it had been whispers when no one was speaking, items a little closer to hand than expected, a hunch that was just a little too solid, eyesight sharper than it had been the day before... Little things, dismissible things. But slowly, steadily, they grew into unmistakable things. Thoughts heard before they were spoken, objects flying through the air at a whim, certain knowledge of an event no one could have predicted, visions of places miles away, and more.

Not everyone had showed the signs, at first, and those who talked about what was happening were labeled crackpots. But only for a few days. Soon enough the Awakening came to everyone. The sooner your gift came to you, the stronger it was, but everyone had found some new ability.

Ducky could see into the past just by touching something. Abby turned out to be an honest to God medium. McGee and Ziva were both telepaths, though she was stronger than he was. Gibbs himself had become a pre-cognitive--the gut come into its own at last. And Tony...Tony was an empath.

It must have come to him first, although he hadn't mentioned it until Ziva and Ducky had admitted their own talents. Two days after that, they all knew that Tony was stronger than the rest of them. He started flinching when strangers passed too close to him. Another day, and he couldn't stand to be out in public. He slept at the office because the apartments at his place were too close together. Soon he couldn't stand to be in the squad room if there were more than three people in the entire place. By the end of the day after that, six days since he'd admitted his gift, Tony had gone completely non-responsive.

It wasn't quite the first case they'd seen, the doctor told Gibbs when they took Tony to the hospital. It wasn't the last, either. According to a few telepaths who'd volunteered to touch the minds of the withdrawn, the most sensitive telepaths and empaths had been swamped with the clamor of thoughts and emotions, as if a hundred people were screaming in their ears while a thousand more whispered in the background. They'd escaped the only way they could.

So while the world struggled to figure out how to handle people who knew what you were really thinking and feeling, who could see events unfolding in distant places, who knew exactly what had happened yesterday and the day before and a hundred years ago, who could see stock market changes hours ahead of time and a hundred other things, Tony slept. And while Tony slept, Gibbs kept watch.

Not constantly, of course. People were taking advantage of their new abilities in ugly ways as well as amazing ones and Gibbs's team was in demand, more than any other, given that Gibbs was the strongest pre-cog in NCIS. But he came after work most days and sat with Tony for an hour or two. If he was there on a Friday Tony's doctor would drop in and give him an update.

For all the unchanging nature of Tony's condition, the doctor's visits weren't just a sop to Gibbs's concern--or the sneaking, helpless guilt he couldn't quite drive away. They were learning more about the Awakening and the gifts it had brought out every day and there was always the chance that they'd find some way to shield the oversensitive and let them come back to the world again.

Today was a Friday and Gibbs was sitting with Tony in the rec room, looking out the windows at the city. A hospital wouldn't have a complete recreation room, of course, but when they realized the reason for Tony's withdrawal they'd moved him to a long term care facility. Gibbs had fought it--at least while he was in the hospital, Tony was a visible problem--but once again, the Awakening had defeated him. Maybe that's why he was so scrupulous about is own visits. As hard as it was to see a man as vital and energetic as Tony had been sitting waxenly and staring into space, it would be worse to let him slip away, not even mourned, just forgotten.

Gibbs's neck prickled. Not his gift, just the ordinary awareness any person had when they were being watched. He shifted in his chair a little and nodded at the doctor waiting a few steps away. "Doctor Leigh. Have a seat," Gibbs suggested.

The doctor picked up a plastic chair and set it down next to Gibbs. "Special Agent Gibbs," he greeted, sitting and laying a clipboard across his lap. Face down, Gibbs noticed. "It's good to see you." I wasn't sure you were coming back.

The words were unspoken, but Gibbs didn't have to be a telepath to know they were there. He'd missed the last two Fridays in a row thanks to cases and he didn't see Leigh when he visited during the rest of the week. The Doctor couldn't organize his schedule around one patient, after all. He'd probably thought Gibbs had given up on Tony.

"Work," Gibbs said shortly. "How's he doing?" He nodded at Tony. Tony himself, of course, was unresponsive to the conversation. He simply sat, dressed in a pair of pale blue cotton pajamas--hospital pajamas, since Tony hadn't turned out to have any of his own when they'd gathered his things for the move--and stared glassily out the window. No smile, no twinkle in his eye, his hair flat against his skull. Where the hell are you, DiNozzo?

"He's the same," Doctor Leigh said. "But there has been a development with his type of case."

Gibbs sat up sharply, eyes narrowing. "What sort of development?"

"Agent Gibbs, I don't want to unduly raise your hopes--"

"Just spit it out, Doctor," Gibbs ordered sharply.

Leigh paused and turned his clipboard over on his lap, glancing down as if he needed the reference. "Last week," he said, "a doctor in Minneapolis agreed to let a telepath attempt to put a woman, a finder, in contact with her husband, an empath. He was in the same state as Tony, for the same reason."

"I thought telepaths could only read personally," Gibbs said skeptically. "They aren't supposed to be able to act as conduits."

"we've barely had a month to study these new gifts," Leigh said, spreading his hands and shrugging. "We're still finding our limits."

Gibbs grunted. "So what happened?"

"We're not entirely sure," Leigh admitted. "None of the three of them have been able to clearly articulate it. But he woke up."

"And the catch?" Gibbs asked calmly.

Doctor Leigh smiled wryly. "You're a perceptive man, Agent Gibbs. Apparently the telepath created some sort of feedback loop between the woman and her husband. He senses her emotions, and only her emotions. He came out of the catatonic state because the roar of input was reduced to a single channel. But the nature of the feedback loop that made that possible means that his wife is reading his emotions as well. What's more..." Leigh paused. "The bond seems to be permanent."

Permanent. The word seemed to echo.

Trigger! Gibbs realized. He grabbed his chair, his gift blazing to life and blotting out reality. Images flashed by, each striking him with the full weight of their implications before vanishing again:

The team, gathered around Tony, arguing. McGee uncomfortable, Abby fierce, Ziva guilty, Gibbs driving them into silence, and overlying it all, felt though not seen, Tony shrinking away, retreating into the dark. Deeper.

Tony standing, awake, responsive, his arms wrapped around Abby. Both of them were crying, but in Gibbs's mind's eye the scene shaded through the arc of time from bright yellow joy to a sluggish, resigned navy blue.

And last, a familiar scene. The wheelchair. The window. The same but for the streaks of gray in Tony's hair and the utter absence of any accompanying chairs.

Gibbs blinked furiously, the last vision slowly fading into reality, and realized that he was sitting askew on his chair, hands white-knuckled from trying to stop himself from pitching onto the floor as the visions struck him like blows. Doctor Leigh was crouching in front of him, holding onto his arms, helping keep him in his seat.

"Are any of your staff telepaths?" Gibbs asked hoarsely. Hearing his voice, he worked up a mouthful of saliva and swallowed heavily, wondering if he'd been shouting.

"Three of them," Leigh said softly. "But don't rush this, Agent Gibbs. Give it time. Talk to his family, his loved ones. This will change two lives, not one."

Gibbs stared into Leigh's pale gray eyes and set his jaw. "Go get one of them," he said flatly.

"Agent Gibbs--"

"Now."

Leigh hesitated for a long moment, but under the force of Gibbs's glare he slowly rose to his feet. "Please give this some thought, Agent Gibbs," he said. "Even if you are the best choice to bond with Tony, this isn't a decision to be made lightly. The bond is more serious than a marriage; you can't take it back." He paused another moment, then turned and left.

Gibbs waited until he was a few steps away, then hauled his chair around so that he was sitting facing Tony. "I won't leave you here, Tony," he said quietly, looking into Tony's unfocused gaze. Gibbs lifted his hand and cupped the younger man's cheek. "I'll bring you out of here myself." He almost expected Tony to blink and focus, to grin and gloat over Gibbs's concern, but the moment passed.

Slowly, Gibbs let his hand fall and sat back, a soft breath escaping him. Watching Tony withdraw as his gifts grew stronger had been like watching the man die inside. Gibbs had never felt so helpless in his life. Seeing Tony look to him and knowing there was nothing he could do...Gibbs clenched his hands just remembering.

Well, he could do something now, and he would. For once these God damned gifts were going to do some good instead of just fucking up the status quo. Besides, Gibbs thought wryly, I'm probably better equipped to live with DiNozzo in my head than anyone else.

"Agent Gibbs?"

Gibbs looked up to find Doctor Leigh waiting with a young woman with short brown hair and soft green eyes. He focused on her. "You're the telepath?"

She nodded, a little self-consciously, hands clasped in front of her. "Yes, but Agent Gibbs, I've never tried this before. I'm not even sure what it is I'm supposed to do."

"I doubt the first guy did, either," Gibbs said briskly. "Whatever happened, instinct drove it. It'll drive it this time, too."

"The first pair were husband and wife," Doctor Leigh said gently. "You could argue there was a bond there already. Without that degree of intimacy--"

"Tony and I have watched each other's backs under fire for years, Doctor Leigh," Gibbs interrupted. "It may be a different kind of closeness, but it still counts." He could see the doubt in Leigh's eyes, but the doctor didn't say anything, just inclined his head briefly and turned to the nurse.

"Carol, if you're willing..."

The nurse nodded and sat carefully in the chair that Leigh had vacated earlier. "Well," she said uncertainly, "I guess if I'm trying to put you in touch with each other, the first step is for me to get in touch with you."

"You need me to do anything?" Gibbs said, consciously easing his voice a little.

Carol shook her head. "Non-telepaths can't usually tell when they're being read," she said. "Just sit there and concentrate on Tony. That'll at least let me know what I'm supposed to be listening for."

Concentrating on Tony wasn't hard, though Gibbs felt an unfamiliar edge of self-consciousness at knowing his thoughts were an open book to Carol. Perfect outward control was no good when someone could look inside. Wake up, DiNozzo, Gibbs thought, carefully forming the words, preventing any others from cohering. Focus. On me, Tony.

"Tony's not a telepath," Carol said, her voice strangely distracted. "He can't hear you when you think. He doesn't know you're there. He needs to recognize how you feel."

The touchy feely crap strikes again, Gibbs thought wryly. But he closed his eyes and remembered what it was like when he got into the office and found DiNozzo leaning back in his chair, legs propped up on his desk, snoring away. The familiar snap of impatience shot through him, amusement following close on its heels as Tony jerked upright in the chair, almost overbalancing and spilling onto the floor, and the rush of satisfaction at Tony's quick, clear, "On your six, boss," as if he'd never been caught napping at all.

A strange uncertainty floated through Gibbs. He tried to calm the feeling and felt it slide seamlessly into tentative welcome, tinted with confusion.

Tony? Gibbs thought. But of course, Tony wouldn't be able to hear his thoughts. He was an empath, not a telepath. Get your ass back here, DiNozzo! Gibbs tried to project impatience and expectation and welcome all at once.

Longing washed over Gibbs, but fear chased it away and was replaced in turn with an impression of blackness, emptiness, and a heavy, smothering sense of security that made Gibbs gasp for breath. He dug his way through the dark, a hint of something that wasn't quite panic shooting through him. Tony was buried somewhere in here, crushed under the weight of that mockery of security.

Something familiar called to Gibbs through that suffocating emotion, curled in on itself, hiding. Gibbs did the only thing he could think of: he blazed with every emotion he could summon. Tony--it had to be Tony--uncurled in a welter of shock and anger. Gibbs blazed brighter. You don't hide from this. You don't hide from me.

Tony lashed out and a spike of concentrated emotion ripped through Gibbs, as if to say, You see what I have to deal with? But it was Tony reaching out, Tony's emotions being sent because he couldn't send any others, and Gibbs didn't flinch. He seized hold and pulled, as if he could physically yank Tony out of his withdrawal. Shock arced through Tony and slammed into Gibbs and he gasped but held on and kept holding on through the spasm of panic that ripped through Tony. I've got you. I won't let go. You won't let go.

A sense of sudden, desperate seeking and then something clicked into place and need and fear swept through Gibbs, a hundred time stronger than before. His eyes snapped open and he flew out of his chair, taking a step forward to stand over Tony. He rested one hand on the back of the wheelchair and tapped Tony's cheek sharply. "Focus, DiNozzo," Gibbs said roughly.

Urgency chased the fear away and suddenly Tony was blinking frantically. After a moment the flutter of his eyelids slowed and he focused. "Boss?" he said hoarsely.

Gibbs couldn't help the surge of relief and pleasure that single word brought him, nor could he help feeling Tony's answering happiness. "Yeah," Gibbs said aloud. "It's about damn time you quit sleeping on the job, DiNozzo."

Tony blinked, his expression a perfect reflection of the surprise ricocheting around inside him, but then he laughed, and the sound was wreathed in warmth and satisfaction, as if Gibbs had said exactly the right thing. "Got it, Boss," Tony said cockily.

Gibbs could feel the expectation, but he reached out and gave Tony a light smack upside the head anyway.

--End--
 
 
 
Everybody wants a thrillkelly_girl on May 27th, 2006 02:24 am (UTC)
I loved this! I liked the quick explanation of how everyone had gifts. I loved Gibbs determination to bring Tony back.

Besides, Gibbs thought wryly, I'm probably better equipped to live with DiNozzo in my head than anyone else.

Ha! I think this is my favorite line.

I would definitely love a sequel. Heck, you could do an entire verse here and delve into other fandoms since everyone has gifts.

*Wonders if Gibbs sex drive will go wayyy up now that he and Tony are connected*
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 2nd, 2006 01:16 pm (UTC)
I loved this! I liked the quick explanation of how everyone had gifts.

Whew! I was worried that setting up the universe with exposition would be clunky. "Show, don't tell" has been beaten into me perhaps a little too thoroughly. *grins*

Heck, you could do an entire verse here and delve into other fandoms since everyone has gifts.

The thought had occurred to me. *grins* But with the two centaur series to maintain, I'm not sure how wise it would be to start another 'verse. It's hard enough to find time to write anything but the centaurs as is, and I usually only manage flashfic. If I had another universe going...yeah, too much committment, I think.

*Wonders if Gibbs sex drive will go wayyy up now that he and Tony are connected*

*laughs* Not a thought that had occurred to me, I admit. But a fun one. *g*

Thanks so much for the comments!
sanderssandersyager on May 27th, 2006 03:22 am (UTC)
I want to be articulate but I'm basking in the feeling of just really loving this story. I agree with kelly_girl, I'd love to see more and I think it would be an interesting universe to play with. I think I might want to talk with you about applying this concept to another fandom, if you're open to it.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:20 am (UTC)
I want to be articulate but I'm basking in the feeling of just really loving this story.

*beams* Thanks!

I agree with kelly_girl, I'd love to see more and I think it would be an interesting universe to play with.

I have more of the universe in my head, but given my committments to the two centaur series I'm writing, I don't think I have the time to devote to fleshing out a whole other universe the way it deserves. At least, I don't right now. :-(

Unfortunately, I'm also a control freak about the universes I create. I'm not comfortable with other people playing in them, especially when the only thing I've written defining the universe is a 2,800 word short fic. That's just not enough time to set up the rules properly, you know?

But I would be interested in seeing how someone else handles the "everyone gets ESP" idea in another fandom. The only two really recognizable things in this story are the term "Awakening" and the details of the bond. If those two things were tweaked a little, it wouldn't be the same universe.
sanderssandersyager on June 7th, 2006 03:50 am (UTC)
To be clear, I think it would be an interesting universe to see *you* play with. (I was inarticulate, and possibly without caffeine, when I commented)

I respect and value that you're a control freak. I, myself, am extremely neurotic and didn't want to inadvertently step on your toes. My thought after reading this was wondering what CSI (where I'm hiding my denial about Hiatus wears off) would look like with everyone having some form of ESP, but I didn't want to touch even the remotest hint of that idea without checking it out with you first. I love the idea of the Awakening and of the bond, but it's the broader concept of everyone developing/discovering/honing powers that interests me for my own writing.
crimsonquills on June 8th, 2006 03:43 am (UTC)
My thought after reading this was wondering what CSI (where I'm hiding my denial about Hiatus wears off) would look like with everyone having some form of ESP, but I didn't want to touch even the remotest hint of that idea without checking it out with you first.

I've actually had prior CSI bunnies involving everyone getting ESP, but I know those will never get written because I just don't have the kind of feeling for CSI fandom that I have for the fandoms I write it. I like it, I read a bizarre OTP for it (Nick/Hodges), but I know I'll never write it.
tsugath: McGee approvedtsugath on May 27th, 2006 03:40 am (UTC)
This was great. The idea is quite interesting, and it was very well written for being a short fic. Think about a sequel?
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:21 am (UTC)
Thank you! I have pondered a sequel, but I've got a lot of other fic committments at the moment. We'll have to see if the bunny fights its way to the top of the queue. *g*
Rinne: Gibbs nice by bunny_iconsrinkle on May 27th, 2006 06:45 am (UTC)
Wow.

I normally don't like things that are this "AU", but I loved this.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:22 am (UTC)
Thank you! I do try to make my AUs painless to buy into.
magnifica7: Boomagnifica7 on May 27th, 2006 07:43 am (UTC)
Yes. This is brimming with potential. I am reminded of the many AUs that keep the The Magnificent Seven fandom alive and kicking...

I was nearly holding my breath while reading this. So very well done! :)
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:23 am (UTC)
I am reminded of the many AUs that keep the The Magnificent Seven fandom alive and kicking...

Bizarrely, for a relatively normal cop/military drama, NCIS does seem to inspire a lot of AUs, doesn't it? Werewolves, centaurs, werebunnies, vampires, zombies...I've seen 'em all done (sometimes more than once!) and more.

Thanks so much for the feedback!
ladynyxchaosladynyxchaos on May 27th, 2006 07:48 am (UTC)
This is way cool. There aren't many team power stories that are that well written. Sequel?
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:24 am (UTC)
I'm thinking about a sequel, but I have a lot of other writing priorities at the moment, alas. We'll see how strong the bunny is.

Thanks for the feedback!
Mabiana: Baummabiana on May 27th, 2006 11:41 am (UTC)
Very interesting story, I hope you write the sequel.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:24 am (UTC)
Thanks! The sequel will have to duke it out with the other bunnies I have in mind, alas. *g*
bcwrites: Tony eyesbcwrites on May 27th, 2006 12:58 pm (UTC)
I'm usually a bit leery of this type of AU but I really enjoyed this. Their bond is stronger than most marriages. I wouldn't mind a sequel if you are up to it.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:25 am (UTC)
I'm glad you gave me a chance to convince you the universe could work. *smiles* There is a possibility of a sequel, but with all the other fic committments I have, we'll see if it survives.

Thanks for the feedback!
lady angel: jimdameange on May 27th, 2006 01:14 pm (UTC)
oh nix, is there *anything* i can give you to entice you write more in this universe? anything? my first born? my cats and dogs? anything?

{g}

needless to say, i utterly LOVE this story. everything from the plotline to gibbs' tone was wonderful and right on the money. thank you so much for writing this. and please, please, write more of it!
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:28 am (UTC)
*laughs* I'm glad you liked it so much! *smiles* Alas, my muses are very fickle creatures. I've tried to bribe them, but they just pick what they like anyway. We'll see if the sequel bunny fights its way to the top of the heap.

Many thanks for the feedback!
rednetra: Creamsrednetra on May 27th, 2006 01:31 pm (UTC)
IM happy to see this. i always enjoy your take on Au and this was no diffrent. thanks for sharing.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:28 am (UTC)
Thank you for commenting!
Bettina_bettina_ on May 27th, 2006 02:21 pm (UTC)
This was really great, I love this sort of thing. I'd love to read more of it :-).
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:28 am (UTC)
Thanks! As for more...well, we'll see. *smiles*
belladonnaf66belladonnaf66 on May 27th, 2006 02:54 pm (UTC)
Whoo hoo! New Universe time!!
This is SUCH a great premise! I can see all of the fandoms being written in...you need to write more! 'Casue this is too cool!!! Are you gonna let people play in your sandbox??
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:30 am (UTC)
Re: Whoo hoo! New Universe time!!
And here I just thought I was throwing in a little one off! *grins* Well, I probably still am, although a sequel is certainly possible, if it survives the bunny fights for precendence that happen in my brain...

As for letting other people play, I'm kind of a control freak about the universes I create. I'm not comfortable with other people playing in them, especially when the only thing I've written defining the universe is a 2,800 word short fic. That's just not enough time to set up the rules properly, you know? So unfortunately, the answer is no.

Many thanks for the feedback!
belladonnaf66belladonnaf66 on June 7th, 2006 03:46 am (UTC)
Re: Whoo hoo! New Universe time!!
I totally understand!

Can't wait to read more!! and do I understand about bunny fights-damn things!!

_tweeter_: Michael & Pauley_tweeter_ on May 27th, 2006 03:03 pm (UTC)
Wow, I love this! Poor Tony, drowning in voices and feelings. I usually don't like to ask for a sequel, I think it puts pressure on the writer, but... is there more to this? The possibilities are endless!
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:31 am (UTC)
There is a sequel bunny, but whether or not it gets written depends on if it survives the bunny-on-bunny combat that happens in my brain. *g* I get way too many ideas to write them all, alas.

Thanks for the feedback!
gaylarain on May 28th, 2006 08:31 am (UTC)
This is a brilliant concept. I personally would love it if you allowed others to write in this universe. I would love to see the results of the Awakening in sooo many fandoms. Please start a community maybe? If you open this to other writers it could be huge. Please? I don't write myself but there is so much potential here.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:32 am (UTC)
I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Unfortunately, I'm kind of a control freak about the universes I create. I'm not comfortable with other people playing in them, especially when the only thing I've written defining the universe is a 2,800 word short fic. That's just not enough time to set up the rules properly, you know? So regretfully, I will not be inviting others to play in this world.
Pigglet27: G/di lookpigglet27 on May 28th, 2006 04:46 pm (UTC)
Wow. I love this. Poor Tony and I could just feel how much Gibbs wanted and needed Tony back.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:32 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you so much for saying that. I was quite afraid that I hadn't laid enough of a foundation for Gibbs's feelings.
tucker_liztucker_liz on May 28th, 2006 08:33 pm (UTC)
This is just so...I don't know, perfect in the abilities that were doled out and how each responded. I'd really like to see more stories in this universe.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:33 am (UTC)
I thought pretty carefully about who got which ability. I almost didn't make Abby a medium because it seemed cliched, but in the end I just couldn't resist. *g*

As for more stories in the universe...well, we'll have to see if the bunnies are strong enough to survives. *smiles*

Thanks for the feedback!
adafrogadafrog on May 29th, 2006 03:37 am (UTC)
Very interesting premise. I really liked how you showed Gibbs finding Tony.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:34 am (UTC)
Thank you! I always worry that abstract scenes like that won't translate to the reader properly. I'm very pleased that it worked. *smiles*
periwinkle27: Ducky w/camera by TooMuchFandomperiwinkle27 on May 30th, 2006 06:09 am (UTC)
This was very well done. I like how you assigned the gifts, although my mouth quirked when I read that Ducky could see into the past. My immediate thought was "Of course he can -- he's lived in it!" (grin)

Fascinating story.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:35 am (UTC)
although my mouth quirked when I read that Ducky could see into the past. My immediate thought was "Of course he can -- he's lived in it!" (grin)

*laughs* Well, even more past than that. *g* It did seem a completely natural gift for him.

Thanks for commenting!
k and m: OTPtwoweevils on May 30th, 2006 01:11 pm (UTC)
Very cool idea! And beautifully executed! Each ability was perfectly suited to each character. Love Gibb's line about "touchy-feely crap".

Nice work!

M.
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 7th, 2006 03:35 am (UTC)
*beams* Thank you! And yeah, couldn't have all that babbling on about emotions without it making Gibbs grumpy at least once. *g*
shazkatt on June 9th, 2006 03:37 pm (UTC)
I agree it could be a great multiverse to play with, all the CSI's, Jag is already part of the NCIS uni and imagine the laws and situation in the process of being created for the Jag lawyers to deal with.

Hell easiest explaination for the awakening would be to add Stargat you could probably work out why it happened some ALien idiot triggered a evolution step before time or something *smirk*

That whole second evolution of the form thing would be a great reason. While I haven't watch all of SGI it seems like there are actually three forms of human evolved in the universe the Ancients with the ATA gene the pegesus humans created by the Ancients and the Earth humans who evolved on Earth, add all that together you can easily say the awakening was the natural evolution of the Earth evolved form which are different to the pegasus who were made by the ancients. The super sensitive ones like Tony could easily be due to the ancient's genetics added to the mix. Basically Tony had the ATA the ancients also had powers afterall so the hybrids with the ATA would probably be more senitive and less in control.

Just a thought.

on a side note can you imagine the shake upp in all the laws, on a legal footing what would Tony and Gibbs be to each other. Would Tony be classified as Gibbs phycic dependent, mental bondmate or what? *smirk*

They must still be creating laws here to cover all the new problems and needs.

Plus just what does happen when you link a really strong precog with a really strong empath into one unit, wouldn't be surprised if they now give a telepath a fit when they try to read them due to the constant link shifting between them like a phycic barrier, maybe baff bags for any telepath trying to read them now. Definately make them popular if their mind can't be read when investigating sensitive material. *smirk* A new way to stop telepathic reporters or terrorists. *grin*

Shaz
CrimsonQuills: FeedbackBlessedcrimsonquills on June 10th, 2006 02:53 am (UTC)
You know, I hadn't thought about the legal aspects, but boy, would those get complicated fast. Too bad I've never seen JAG. (Except for the NCIS crossover eps, of course.)

Alas, a Stargate crossover would never happen even if I had time to develop this universe properly. I have...issues with Stargate fandom, alas.

You had some really interesting thoughts on the universe. Thanks for sharing!
shazkatt on June 10th, 2006 05:10 am (UTC)
Never got into SG1 fandom either but I love Stargate Atlantis.

Only other fandom that would be easier would be Buffy, Willows spell to activate the potentials could easily zapped all the potential in humans not just slayers *smirk* but even without crossover it would be easy to explain some mad scientist triggered it or a reaction to a certain level of pollution in the atmosphere. The scients will be going mad trying to explain it.

It does sound like everyone is actually still waking up from what I read it might eventually get to be everyone with the same powers just in different strengths. Sort of like average human can run but athletes can run better etc.

I think some got physical as well hearing, seeing better etc so it could very well be a physical evolutionary step as well. Faster reflexes, better senses, and memory better immune system to match the mental jump.

On the down side if it got triggered early in some manner you are going to get people having trouble with physical stuff as well as mental. Not just the super sensitives like Tony ther problem is basically the speed of the activation they never had a chance of developing shields, if it had been gradual buildup they would have formed shields as they went. I'm talking things like new immune systems attacking a person instead of helping etc basically everything that can go wrong with a normal person medically exagerated if the evolutionay jump was trigger to soon and people weren't quite ready. A percentage could very well die from such things.

Shaz
crimsonquills on June 10th, 2006 06:08 pm (UTC)
Never got into SG1 fandom either but I love Stargate Atlantis.

Er, perhaps I wasn't clear. I watch both SG-1 and SGA and enjoy them both, although I prefer SG-1. The shows are great. It's the fans and the fan communities I have issues with. As the issues are all mine and have nothing to do with other folks, I'll stop there. *smiles*

Only other fandom that would be easier would be Buffy, Willows spell to activate the potentials could easily zapped all the potential in humans not just slayers *smirk*

You're just having bad luck with crossover suggestions, 'cause I've got issues with Buffy, too. *g* Although in this case, they're all to do with the show and have nothing to do with the fans or the fan community. I was...unhappy with how things developed with Spike. Stopped watching after fifth season.

It does sound like everyone is actually still waking up from what I read it might eventually get to be everyone with the same powers just in different strengths. Sort of like average human can run but athletes can run better etc.

Well, everyone wouldn't have the same powers. Everyone gets just one type of ESP at a particular strength. So you'd have strong and weak pre-cogs, strong and weak telepaths, etc.

I think some got physical as well hearing, seeing better etc so it could very well be a physical evolutionary step as well. Faster reflexes, better senses, and memory better immune system to match the mental jump.

Er, no. In this universe only the ESP developed.

On the down side if it got triggered early in some manner you are going to get people having trouble with physical stuff as well as mental.

Except in this universe nothing got triggered early. It developed in everyone at the same pace. I specifically chose that as the way things happened for a variety of reasons, although none of those explanations made it into the story.

I appreciate your enthusiasm about the idea, but I do have a pretty good idea of how things work in this universe. I'm not really looking for suggestions on how to develop it.